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My second literature submission on DA

This is just a short poem that I created.

Sorry for any grammar error, English is not my mother tongue and not my strongest subject.


Poem©Kzira

I will change the image once I finished the art intended for this poem. For now please don't bash the picture.
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!blackbutlerLogan May 26, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
beautiful!
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~SoulsOfTearDrops May 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Absolutely Lovely!!!
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:iconbertilsdotter:
I love absolutely everything except the last line. To me it feels a bit overly theatrical, but poems are personal and individual, so nothing is ever wrong.
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:iconpolka-rainbow:
This really was tragically lovely. I enjoyed it. :D
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that was very well done my friend excellent
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~DawnBlossom May 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
It's so beautiful! I love how you wrote it with so much emotion.
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Thank you for describing my current feelings... It really touched me.
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*ChikitaWolf May 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There's a lot of emotion in there, and they way you've written this really grabs the reader's attention. I found myself rereading it, haha :XD:
Splendid work, Kzira <3
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~Toshori May 24, 2012  Hobbyist
wow *-*
that sounds so beautiful :3
really well written ^^
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:iconylida:
I like your poem very much. You describe the emotions in a beautiful way, and I love how vulnerable the person seem.
The only thing I don't like, is the time perspective. You keep switching between the present and past tense, which I found a little confusing.
But other than that, I think it's a great poem :)
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